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Thursday, May 30, 2019

Diving

In room 9 we have been writing a story about Underwater. Here is what mine looks like. Thanks for reading my story.
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I saw a moldy haunted mansion
Scary, scared,
I go inside I see a sea snake, skeletons and a shark
creeped out
Used to be made from gold
Sparkly
Find a Treasure map that leads me to a abandoned ship

I find a Treasure chest  full of gold
shiny
One sunny day I wanted to go for a swim. I went very deep into the Ocean. I saw a moldy haunted mansion. I was scared.
I went inside. I saw sea snakes, skeletons and a shark.
I also saw golden bits on the ground. I thought to myself, “Hmm I think that this mansion is made of gold and the gold rusted and then the rust turned into mold.”
I was looking around. I saw a treasure map. It lead me to an abandoned ship.

I found a chest in the corner of the mansion. I am now rich. I got out of the water and went home in my car. I took the chest with me. I showed my mum the chest. With the money we bought a mansion, but our mansion is not under the water.

2 comments:

  1. Hello Azaria.
    Your story is the only story I have read so far,that has a treasure map.
    I like that you said when you brought a mansion,that it wasn't underwater.
    I did notice that in your writing you mentioned that the map lead you to an abandoned ship and then you found a chest in the corner of the mansion.
    Maybe next time you could explain how you got back to the mansion after you had been at the ship.
    Have a great weekend.

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    1. thank you i for got i done that.

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